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And here's your shmoop dooz your brought to you by

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a lone time help people You're having some when you

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don't have a date Long time were experts at high

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school a little All right we're gonna ring stillness Online

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dating was fantasy island Love boat around their parents eating

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popcorn watching tv all day Okay here we go Which

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sentence would best begin Paragraph three And here the potential

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answers Wait All right well we better take a second

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to re read paragraph three right here if we want

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to get this one right Of course if we want

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to get it wrong while we can just bubble in

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whatever we want to get on with our lives Yeah

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Bad idea Alright Let's re read So now that we've

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got the gist of the paragraph will start narrowing down

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our choices Let's begin by nixon choice See which commits

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the unforgivable sin of redundancy repeating the same thing over

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and over and over and over again for shame the

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whole thing and sentence fifteen about stars coming out already

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will tells us it's nighttime not to mention the fact

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that sentence fourteen or in here which ends the previous

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paragraph uses the word tonight So yeah there's Definitely no

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need to be at our readers over the head with

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same idea Unless they're wearing a helmet that it's no

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harm foul We could just do it Okay Choice A

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isn't as blatantly redundant It's c but it's telling us

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something we already know if she's hanging till the stars

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come out then we know it's for a reasonably long

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time ultimately the senses on the nose it gives the

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idea that the reader too easily our readers are almost

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always gonna be more engaged if we make him work

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for it Unless they're lazy readers in which case there's

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no help for it Choice b doesn't work because it

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totally jumps the gun talk about unsafe with that lock

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back on the rest of the paragraph tells us all

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about how the world suddenly creeps in on the girl

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disturbing her peaceful contemplations So if we start the paragraph

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offer the idea that she's being disturbed it makes the

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rest of the paragraph useless And we all know how

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cranky paragraphs could get when they don't feel needed All

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right the best choices d sentence fifteen is doing a

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good job of introducing the paragraph all by itself is

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a good thing Word on the street is that sentence

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fifteen doesn't work well with others So you know we

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got a job for you sat still so charming When

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i wanna remind you move again And occasional chri Pardon 00:02:19.858 --> [endTime] and mental illness

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