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Wordiness, a la Shmoop. Mr. Zazzles, the algebra teacher, has some
- 00:09
bad news that's truly terrible.
- 00:11
He just wants to let his students know that they're going to have to go ahead and do
- 00:17
those fifty problems from page 127 for homework during the Thanksgiving holiday.
- 00:21
If Mr. Zazzles' students don't break out the pitchforks and torches over his homework
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assignment...
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...they'll send him to the guillotine for his wordiness and redundancy.
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When we want to get someone's attention or sound important, we sometimes shoehorn
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extra words into our sentences. We get wordy.
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Redundancy is a kind of wordiness. It involves saying the same thing in a sentence more than
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once, and sometimes in a different way.
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While wordiness and redundancy can be annoying to listen to...
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...they are really annoying to encounter in written sentences.
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For example, when Ms. Razzle the science teacher puts a note on a lab assignment that reads,
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"It is absolutely essential that students not mix Chemical A with Chemical B, inasmuch
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as that would cause a massive explosion"...
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...she's guilty of wordiness.
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The word "essential" doesn't need to be preceded by "absolutely"...
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...and Ms. Razzle could have used "since" or "because" instead of "inasmuch as".
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When Ms. Doe the cook puts a sign up at the beginning of the lunch line that reads,
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"Owing to the fact that we made too much broccoli-spinach-and-cheese casserole today,
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go ahead and take two helpings"...
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...she's guilty of wordiness...
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...not to mention crimes against vegetables and cheddar.
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The phrase "owing to the fact" could be replaced with "because"...
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...and that "go ahead" could be excised from Ms. Doe's sign altogether.
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When Mr. Moe the history teacher puts in his syllabus, "The required midterm book
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report has a required length of five pages"...
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...he's guilty of redundancy.
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A redundancy-free sentence might read, "The midterm book report must be five pages long."
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When Mr. Yoe the English teacher leaves a note on the whiteboard that reads, "The
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writing assignment for the day is to write a poem about writing"...
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...he, too, is guilty of redundancy.
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He might have written, "Today's assignment is to compose a poem about writing."
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When Ms. Johnson the PE teacher...writes in her journal that the reason
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she loves Thanksgiving break is because she doesn't have to even think about work...
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...she's also guilty of redundancy.
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A redundancy-free sentence would be rewritten to exclude either "the reason" or "is
- 02:36
because", as these two sets of words mean the same thing.
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Wordiness and redundancy are easy to avoid. Just look for those extra words or phrases
- 02:45
that muddy up the construction or the meaning of a sentence...
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...and snip-snip those suckers.
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Now, if only Mr. Zazzles would learn that using unnecessary words to announce holiday
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math homework does not make that homework less awful... or his students less vengeful...
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