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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.

Unlike the adults


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All right sy writing shmoop er's working on a new

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section here modifying phrases and clauses and logical transition so

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well let's Just get down to it Not many adults

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were swimming in the cold water of the lake but

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several children splashed around in the shallows All right we're

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going to rewrite this thing's starting with unlike the adults

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comma dot dot dot All right so rewritten sentence starts

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with the words unlike the adults here which means that

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the next words need to describe who or what was

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not like the adults Well that was more straightforward than

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we thought it would be in this case the who

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or what would be the children children of the corn

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who in the wild bravery of youth are taking the

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plunge into the cold water while the adults likely with

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way more body fat stay think heartedly upon the shore

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what several children were sets us up for a full

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concise sentence so that's it it's de unlike the adult

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several children were swimming yeti eta all right the wrong

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bowl here while several children who almost works but it

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doesn't set us up for a complete sentence The entire

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excerpt is written in third person so don't go changing

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point of view without consent like and be and then

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when comparing the adults to the children the children need

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to be the closest thing to the comma like aids

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that's Why a doesn't work that's it it's the several 00:01:26.876 --> [endTime] children were shmoop

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