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Thank you We sneak here's your shmoop du jour brought

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to you by debt because nobody likes artists who only

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swim in the shallow in ueno We've been there checking

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the following passage were skimming quickly representational armament painting proportion

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and realize anyone Can jackson moaning watery look because i'm

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here No All right What is the best way to

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rewrite sentence twenty and hear the potential answers All right

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come on option d we know change can be scary

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but in this case while it's necessary for one since

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twenty is a run on sentence because it connects to

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independent clauses without putting a comma before the conjunction and

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secondly it's extremely convoluted and hard to understand this writer

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would definitely never work for shmoop there's no way deacon

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stay on the list option a can go to as

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it isn't any better than the original sense In fact

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this version is pretty convoluted on its own right make

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matters worse it also forgets to put a comma before

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which whenever we see the word witch there's a good

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chance that we need to put a comma before it

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because which usually introduces a non restrictive cloth Well these

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air clauses that don't change the meaning of the sense

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of their removed in this version of sense which introduces

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a clause that gives us more info on what texture

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is But these fun facts aren't totally essential so moving

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on c doesn't work either As a matter of fact

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this might be the worst version of the sentence yet

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so let's dig deeper we don't technically need the comma

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before the phrase and helps create death since it's not

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an independent Klaus there's No subject in this phrase it's

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just the verb create doing its own thing Beyond this

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grammatical mistake the layout of the sense makes it hard

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to understand texture is the thing that's creating debt Option

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b is the only answer that gets it all right

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It cures the original sentences case of the run on

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by well you know not being a run on more

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than anything This version is better organized with a clear

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cause and effect It's Easy to understand how the brushstrokes

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and thickness of paint add up to make texture which

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then equals death So it turns out that already is

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more like math And we thought so too bad by 00:02:17.415 --> [endTime] the numbers doesn't count

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