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ACT English: Sentence Structure Drill 1, Problem 4. Which punctuation fits best?
ACT English: Sentence Structure Drill 2, Problem 1. Which choice best punctuates this sentence?
ACT English: Sentence Structure Drill 4, Problem 3. How could this sentence be written to best exemplify parallel construction?
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ACT English: Sentence Structure Drill 3, Problem 4. How should the sentence be changed to make it as clear as possible?
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Here's your Shmoop du jour, brought to you by stalkers. Believe it or not, they don't
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spend all that much time detasseling corn.
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How should you change the below sentence, if at all?
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He was staring at the girl, wearing dark glasses, by the vending machine.
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So we've got a girl, some dark glasses, a vending machine, and some guy who can't keep
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his eyes to himself. Could this be the beginning of Taken 3? Time will tell'
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Anyway, let's take a look at choice (A) and see how the original sentence did with its modifying phrases.
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We're not sure who the phrase, "wearing dark
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glasses," is supposed be talking about. Is it the mysterious girl, or the creepy guy
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who's staring at her?
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The placement of the modifying phrase and the fact that commas separate it makes it
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impossible to tell who plunked down some cash at the Sunglass Hut. So, we can nix choice
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(A).
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(B) makes it completely clear who's wearing the sunglasses with "at the girl wearing dark
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glasses."
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However, it is confusing who exactly is standing by the vending machine.
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Choice (B) gets the boot.
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Choice (C) is incorrect because "machine" should be secondary to the object of the action.
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The vending machine isn't the important thing here; it's the girl who has caught this creeper's
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attention. Therefore it's awkward to give the vending machine priority in the sentence.
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Choice (D) paints a clear picture of this whole sinister scenario. By placing the phrase,
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"who was wearing dark glasses," directly after "girl" we know for sure that she's the one
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wearing sunglasses.
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Because "by the vending machine" isn't separated by a comma, it's completely clear that it's
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modifying girl by telling us where exactly she's standing.
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Quick tip: if you're seriously interested in somebody, it's not the best idea to stare
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at him or her creepily before approaching.
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