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All right Aspiring a ct shmoop er's Here we go

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seven to twelve on focus right here And you might

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be surprised to learn that some psychologists all right so

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we're zipping on paragraph four right here Many people assume

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that our personalities are simply formed by environmental influences like

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upbringing and past experiences not past lives per se And

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you might be surprised to learn that some psychologists believe

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that at least fifteen personality is determined by genetics All

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right well let's think about this The use of you

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right there to directly address the reader doesn't fit very

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well with the formality and objective third person tone of

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the passage It's the grammatical equivalent of wearing hot pants

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with the suit jacket creative but ultimately jarring in also

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inappropriate The underlined phrases also wordy But none of those

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extra words actually well say anything meaningful like could have

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been written by a congressman Not surprisingly the longest answer

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choice is out for the same reason So get rid

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of sea there Even the four words it's important to

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learn that it's actually five aren't actually crucial to the

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sentence on ly By making a short and straight to

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the point statement do we fit with the style of

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the passage So it's b But some psychologists and again

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won t there So it should read Many people assume

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that our personality or simply formed by environmental influences like

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upbringing past experiences But some psychologists believe that at least

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fifty percent of personalities turned by genetics that's it and

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were determined by letter b here bye

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